Blog 9

My ideas about telling my story in great detail went well in my essay. I wanted the reader to feel like they were right next to me when things happened. During the conference we went over many new ideas that could help make my essay more powerful. I have decided to take out some things in the story that weren't as important as the new ideas. I will add more detail to some of the parts of th story. I dont want to feel like I left too much information out. I feel like the finished product will blow the old essay out of the water.