blog 20

I'm deciding to rewrite my last draft because I feel like there is more I can do with it. My focus will on making our own decisions and not letting a bond or friendship pull you in to dangerous situations. In draft 4 I tried to involve a good amount of action and descriptive language, but I still feel like I can go so much deeper. To begin, I need to describe what goes on around my friends that put them in their current situation. I feel that the readers need to know why my friends involve themselves in this type of danger. The action in the story was good, but I need to ivolve how the police knew where to find John. I like the draft version but the final revision will be so much better.