Blog 12

After I looked at my two essays, I decided to re-write my first paper. I felt good about my first essay but I feel like there are more things that I can do to make it better. I plan to involve more detail when I write about the actual games that I played in. I want to provide enough detail in order to make the my readers feel like they were actually there. My second essay is going to be heartfelt and honest and I don't plan to leave any room for a rewrite. I want to write this paper so well that there will be no need to edit.